Mañana tengo un examen en el que tengo que hacer una redacción sobre uno de estos dos temas: Fines for teenager law-breackers and More laws to control antosocial behaviour.
He preparado dos modelos de redacción que tengo pensado utilizar y me gustaría que me corrigiérais posibles fallos que puedan tener. Os las dejo en los spoilers.
Gracias de antemano.
1. Fines for teenager law-breackers
Alarmed by the rise in incidents involving teenagers, authorities are considering changing laws to reduce them. This assumes apply new fines for teenafer law-breackers. Though some people think that this could help to reduce bandalism , others aren’t agree on reform the laws. As I see it, there are more advantages and some disadvantages.
On the one hand, it is believed that a third of all street crime are comitted by adolescents. This could be induced by the actually laws, because they are very soft. For this reason, fines more hard, like periods of condemnation more longer, could be the solution. Furthermore, aplying this new fines will presuade future teenagers that they want to commit some vandalism.
On the other hand, people argue that the fines and the laws are correct and the crime street is iduced by the family environment of the teenager. So there is’nt a relation with soft fines. These people say that the control and the fines must be for the family.
In conclusion, while some people argue that the fines are very soft and hardening them could be the solution to reduce the crime streets, other people say that the fines must be for the family. In my opinion, the solution is make fines more hard and we punsih the teenager and the family too. It is the best solution because both are responsible.
2.More laws to control antisocial behavior
Alarmed by the rise of antisocial behavior incidents, authorities are considering changing laws to reduce them. This assumes apply new hard laws for people that they have an antisocial behavior. Though some people think that thins could help to reduce these incidents, others aren’t agree on reform the laws. As I see it, the are more advantages and some disadvanteges.
On the one hand, it is believed that the antisocial behaviour is one of the most common causes in our time. This could be induced by the actually laws because they are more soft. For this reasion, laws more hard, like periods of condemnation more longer, could be the solution. Furthermore, aplying this new masures will persuade future people that they want to have an antisocial behaviour.
On the other hand, people argue that the laws are correct and these problems are caused by the inefficiency of the police. They say that the laws can’t function if the police don’t act properly. Moreover these problems are also caused by the failure on the educational system.
In conclusion, while some people argue that the laws are very soft and hardening them could be the solution to control antisocial behaviour, other people say that the laws aren’t the problem, the problem are the police and the educational system. In my opinion, the solution is make laws more hard, improve the educational metods and enhance the police accion.
